Category: Tankborn Origins

  • Tankborn Outtakes

    Back around October 2009, I finished work on a manuscript titled GENeration, a young adult science fiction book. I knew it wasn’t finished finished. I didn’t yet have an agent or editor for the book, but I knew that when I did, they would have their say in further re-writes. But I thought the book was ready enough to start querying agents. It turned out I was deluding myself, but I nevertheless e-mailed out my first query on October 13, 2009.

    I’d been sending out queries for about a month and a half when it occurred to me that having a beta reader look it over would be a really great idea (gee, ya think?). Luckily, I could keep the read in the family via my younger son. He wasn’t exactly swimming in spare time (he was in the third year of his PhD in economics), but he’s a fast reader and brutally honest. He got back to me at the end of November 2009 with suggestions for some pretty extensive changes.

    Of course, I’d already sent the complete manuscript out to a few agents, including the agent who eventually took me on. Hindsight being what it is, this was when I realized I really hadn’t been ready to start querying. Yes, I wish I’d thought to send the book to my son before that first query. But water under the bridge and all that.

    In any case, those agents who had the manuscript were happy to replace it with the new and improved version. I eventually got offers from two agents. The agent I signed with asked for another major re-write before he sent it out. Then the book sold to Lee and Low/Tu Books, and required even more changes including a title morph from GENeration to Tankborn. Tankborn was released in Sept. 2011.

    Along the way, what with all this re-writing and editing, by necessity a lot of material got deleted from the manuscript. As part of the various and sundry editing, there were four quite sizeable chunks that ended up on the cutting room floor. Each of them was at least a few pages long and the content in them was fairly significant. They offered some pretty cool perspectives of life on the planet Loka, where Tankborn is set. Unfortunately, these scenes didn’t do anything to move the story forward. They didn’t “earn their keep” and had to go.

    But I thought it would be fun to put them up on my website, part of some exclusive material that will only be available there. So if you’d like to read what might have been in Tankborn, take a look here. If you haven’t yet read the book, there is some spoilerage, but it is clearly marked. So it’s safe for all to take a peek.

  • Tankborn Sequels!

    I’ve finally been given my editor’s blessing to announce my good news. There will be two Tankborn sequels: Awakening, which is scheduled for release in Spring 2013 and Revolution, scheduled for Spring 2014.

    I’d been working on Awakening these past several months, even before the offer was in hand, because I wanted so much for Kayla and Devak’s stories to continue. Now the pace for writing book 2 has picked up to a fever-pitch as I work toward a, shall we say, challenging deadline.

    What’s in store for our heroine and hero in Awakening? Aw, you don’t really want to know that, do you? No spoilery here. But I can say there will be more adventures, some familiar returning characters, some new characters, and more intriguing questions asked about humanity, race, and class.

    One fun thing about writing Awakening is that I already have a “story bible” to rely on to use as a basis for my world. Most of the heavy lifting of world-building was done in Tankborn. I get to reap those benefits, using Tankborn as my reference material. At the same time, I’m giving myself the freedom to invent some new things that (hindsight being what it is), I would have mentioned in the course of writing Tankborn if I’d thought of them. It’s very cool to add some layers to Tankborn‘s world. Also quite nifty to know there will be a third book which I can start to set up in Awakening.

    So keep an eye out for updates–cover reveals, blurb teasers, Scribd samples. Spring 2013 will be here before you know it.

  • 15 Videos in 9 Hours (With a Break for Lunch)

    I’ve wanted to create a book trailer for a good long time. I’ve watched other authors’ trailers, admired them, dissected them, and pondered how I might adapt from the best of them a structure for promoting my own book, Tankborn. The process seemed pretty overwhelming to me. Although I’m a former software engineer, I balked at having to learn new tools to create a video. I knew it would take a great deal of time I just don’t have.

    Also, I consider Tankborn to be a fairly cinematic book (seeing as how it originated from a film script). It seemed to me the best way to make an effective trailer for the book would be to use a script and live actors; i.e., to essentially create a short film, which would be pricier than I could afford.

    Without a bottomless budget for said short film, I had to consider a different design for a book promotion video. I’m fortunate enough to have a good friend, Frank Casanova, who owns a production studio, The Studio Center. I’d previously produced a couple of short films with Frank  (check out Sweet Tooth here). So I contacted him in early October 2011, and we did some brainstorming via phone and e-mail about how to proceed.

    Having read an article about creating and releasing a series of videos, Frank and I tossed around ideas of how to create content for multiple videos. I thought that an interview format would work well. I’m comfortable with doing live interviews and have been on camera a couple times before.

    My original concept was to set things up in a talk show format. Frank is also good on camera and as a former radio personality, he has a great voice. I thought we’d both be on the set and he’d ask me the questions and I’d answer. But he nudged me away from that idea, suggesting I be on camera by myself.

    Eventually, we settled on a design for the videos. It required that I come up with a number of questions in advance, as well as formulate how I would answer the questions. Frank agreed to do the camera work and his brother Fred Casanova was kind enough to agree to do the editing work.

    While the idea was still fresh in my mind, I created my list of 15 questions. For at least my own purposes, I categorized the questions by type: Intro (introducing me and Tankborn), Characterization, Multi-Culturalism, World-Building, and Role-Playing. I also devised five “fun” questions which would be edited in if a video required additional length. You’ll see one of my fun questions in the very first video. My goal was to keep the videos at about two minutes, since that’s my personal attention span for a YouTube video. Anything much longer, I tend not to take the time to watch.

    I’d intended to set up some studio time in October right after my brainstorming session with Frank. Life had other ideas, however. Two deaths in the family, not to mention the end of year holidays, delayed production of my videos until January 25, 2012.

    A few days before V-day, thanks to a referral from Frank, I found a makeup artist to “make me beautiful” for the camera. I also baked several dozen chocolate chip “thank you” cookies to take down to the studio.

    With the family issues going on in my life, I didn’t prep my answers for the questions until the day before the shoot. This isn’t quite as crazy as it sounds, since I’d done numerous interviews for blogs where I’d answered questions similar to the ones I’d devised. So the answers had been percolating for some time, at least subconsciously. Also, when I’m presenting in front of people I know I work best speaking off the cuff, using a bullet list. In this case, the “person” I would be speaking to was the camera (and Frank standing next to it). But the extemporaneity coupled with the bullet list works far better for me than trying to memorize a bunch of material.

    I developed a bullet list of three to five points for each of the 15 questions. The sample at left, which I used for the first video, shows the format I used for my bullet list. This first question starts the video series.

    My plan was to glance at my bullet list right before answering the question. Knowing I might forget my points, I also wrote individual keywords on cards for Frank to hold up next to the camera. The night before, as I ran through my bullet points using my keyword cards to trigger my memory, I had no idea how well my process would work during the shoot. I paper-clipped together the keyword cards by question so that Frank could easily reference them and got everything I would need packed up, including my box of Tankborn author copies.

    I arrived at The Studio Center at 8:30am. Since the makeup artist hadn’t arrived yet, Frank and I went into the studio to work out how we wanted the set to look. He pulled out an interesting looking bookshelf and I loaded it up with copies of Tankborn. The section of the stage where Frank would be shooting the videos had been painted a nice medium blue. He added a lighting effect that dappled the wall behind me with cloud-like white. I wanted to be on my feet since that’s how I’m used to presenting, but I was worried I’d move around too much. So I compromised by half-leaning against a tall stool to anchor myself. Another stool beside me held my stack of bullet lists. As you can see in the screenshot above, neither appears on camera in the finished videos.

    After my session with the makeup artist, we started the shoot at about ten. Starting with the first question, Frank grabbed a stack of keyword cards and read the question printed on it out loud. This was for my benefit (so I would know which bullet list to glance over) and also so that Fred would know which video was which when he was later editing. When I let Frank know I was ready to start my answer, he’d hold up the first keyword. While I began to speak, he’d flip to the next card so I’d have a chance to mentally prep for the next bullet.

    That part of the process worked great. Out of the twenty questions asked and answered, I only flubbed four times, such that it required a re-do. There’s also one video that I’m going to need to fix because I later re-thought what I’d said and decided I wanted to edit that out. But we pretty much sailed through the shoot in about an hour and a half.

    The editing part of the process, of course, took much longer. Fred got started while Frank and I broke for lunch, then later I sat looking over Fred’s shoulder while he worked. I’d supplied Fred with the creature artwork Lee and Low had commissioned artist Matthew Leese to do for the tankborn.com website. Fred used a portion of the artwork background for the graphic card background. He also included the creatures and flora on the graphic card. When I realized the Tankborn cover font would be perfect for the question text, I sent an emergency e-mail to my editor and luckily caught her right before she left the office. She e-mailed Fred the font.

    Fred, of course, did most of the work, but I contributed in small ways (like suggesting the font). We worked together to add in the five fun, silly questions/answers, making sure they fit with whatever more serious question we appended them to. When we thought we were finished, then realized we needed music in the background while the graphic cards displayed, I picked the music. Frank has a good-sized collection of royalty-free music and the titles on the CD cases weren’t always enlightening. I lucked out when I found a very cool Indian music piece that fit the mood of Tankborn beautifully.

    We finally finished around 6pm. The next day, Fred sent me preliminary videos and I had him tweak them a bit. I had a link to the final videos two days after the shoot. An hour and a half of shooting, many hours of Fred’s work in the editing bay, and I have 15 videos to share about my book.

    Lee and Low will be putting the videos on their YouTube channel over the next two weeks. Here’s the first one.

    [youtube=http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lxA7LW1kRaw]

  • RTW – Sayin’ It

    I had to leave early this morning, so I didn’t have a chance to check out YA Highway‘s Road Trip Wednesday until now. The prompt for this RTW is “Write a dialogue between two of your favorite YA characters.” Since it’s so late in the day, I’m going to cop-out a bit and write some dialogue between Kayla and Mishalla, characters from my own book, Tankborn. They definitely qualify as two of my favorite YA characters.

    This exchange is based on something mentioned in passing in Tankborn. It’s from Kayla’s and Mishalla’s past, when they were ten years old.

    Mishalla: Kayla! KAYLA!
    (Kayla runs along the riverbank toward Mishalla)
    Kayla: What? What’s wrong?
    Mishalla: (almost crying) I stepped on a sewer toad. It’s all squished between my toes. Don’t you dare laugh at me!
    Kayla: I wouldn’t, not ever.
    Mishalla: Is it going to poison my foot? Why’d you tell me to take off my shoes?
    Kayla: Better muddy feet than muddy shoes. Your nurture mother hasn’t the dhans to buy you a new pair.
    Mishalla: Better muddy shoes than poisoned toes. I think my foot is numb.
    Kayla: Can you walk?
    (Mishalla shakes her head. Now she’s really crying)
    Kayla: Maybe if you wash your foot off in the river?
    Mishalla: Maybe…Oh, no. The Brigade is coming. Across the river. Two of them.
    (Kayla looks)
    Kayla: We have to go. Now!
    Mishalla: I can’t. I can’t feel my foot.
    Kayla: Then I’ll carry you.
    (she starts to pick up Mishalla)
    Mishalla: Wait! Get the sewer toad.
    Kayla: What? Why?
    Mishalla: I want to hide it under my brother’s pillow.
    (Kayla grabs the dead sewer toad and Mishalla wraps it in her skirt. Kayla picks up Mishalla and runs with her back home).

     

  • Embryonic TANKBORN (How a Script Became a Book, Part 2)

    Screenwriting is an entirely different world than the publishing world. The most obvious difference is the format–a script looks entirely different from a book manuscript. In a film script, dialogue is set off in blocks with wider margins. The dialogue alternates with description, each scene identified by an interior or exterior location. As an example, here’s an early script for Blade Runner, one of my favorite movies.

    A script is also 3-hole punched and bound with brads. A book manuscript, on the other hand, is not hole-punched and is generally kept together with rubber bands. At least manuscripts were rubber-banded together in the olden days, when they were sent snail mail to agents and editors. Nowadays, everything is e-mailed.

    It’s always funny to watch TV shows and movies where one of the characters is a novelist. The screenwriter who wrote the script bases the character on their own experience as a writer. The book manuscript will be three-hole punched and bound with brads. The novelist always hands his/her manuscript over to their editor or agent in person. The fictional writer is able to do this because they always seem to live in NYC, just like most actual screenwriters live in L.A. and are able to have personal contact with their agents/producers.

    Anyway… When I wrote Icer, the script that I eventually used as the starting point for my YA book Tankborn, I didn’t just have to learn how to write a story that was suitable for the screen (i.e., everything on the page had to be visual). I also had to learn script format. One problem with this is that although there were many sample scripts available (at that time, in printed, hardcopy form that I could order from a service) the majority of those were shooting scripts. Shooting scripts contain all sorts of camera directions that aren’t appropriate to include in a spec script (a script written on speculation). It took some years of education to figure that out.

    As I mentioned in a previous post, part of that education was a class I took through UCLA Extension. The instructor liked my concept enough that he helped me with the beat outline (essentially coaching me through the plotting process). Later when the script was finished, he suggested that he and a writer friend of his option my script for $1. I wasn’t comfortable with that arrangement, so I was then on my own.

    Here are the first few pages of an early version of Icer.

    Nothing much happened with Icer for a few years. I kept writing, mostly short stories, but a few TV scripts as well. We moved from Southern California to Northern California and my husband and I agreed I’d stay home with the kids and write while the kids were in school. I focused on novels, pretty much forgetting screenwriting.

    Then I stumbled across a tiny ad in Writer’s Digest magazine requesting scripts. Talk about a leap of faith. No way of knowing if the person on the other end of the ad was a fraud or the real deal.

    It turned out to be the latter. I got a call out of the blue one day from Fern Baum of the production company Kanter-Baum. Fern was the daughter of Martin Baum, legendary agent at Creative Artists Agency. Mr. Baum agreed to shop my script on behalf of his daughter.

    I was thoroughly awed by the massive Lichtenstein mural in CAA’s lobby, and my jaw just about dropped seeing the Oscar displayed in a case in Mr. Baum’s office (which had been awarded to Gig Young and bequeathed to Mr. Baum after Gig Young’s death). Even still, I was pretty ignorant about who Marty Baum was and the honor he paid me by agreeing to work with me.

    We went through a number of re-writes and eventually Icer went out to a long list of studios and production companies. One of those submissions was to a brand new studio called Dreamworks, SKG. Alas, Dreamworks passed. Icer was eventually optioned by Prism Entertainment Corporation, a small production company that had previously done a number of lower budget films including When the Bough Breaks starring Martin Sheen.

    I actually had one of those Hollywood “meetings” at Prism where they gave me notes (kind of like an editorial letter, except in real time). It was pretty cool. Everyone threw out ideas, some of them great, some not so much and I scribbled madly. (Note: One of the better ideas is an element that will figure into the second book of the TANKBORN series, TANKBORN AWAKENING.)

    Everyone was very enthusiastic about the script. The notes led to another round of re-writes and the script continued to improve.

    Prism unfortunately couldn’t get funding to proceed so they weren’t able to go any farther with Icer. I co-wrote another script for Kanter-Baum, but we weren’t able to get anywhere with that one either.

    A few years later, I met another producer who liked Icer, Craig Nicholls of Pendle View. We went through another round of re-writes with an eye toward decreasing production costs. By this point, CGI had come of age and what once would have been very expensive special effects could now be done at a much lower cost on a computer.

    With Craig’s guidance, I was able to kick Icer up yet another notch. Still no takers ready to finance the film, despite Craig’s best efforts. He worked with me on another script, a quirky YA time-travel called Timewrecked (now there’s a screenplay that’s ripe for novelization!), but we couldn’t get any traction on that one either.

    You’ve probably gathered reading this post that as tough as it is getting a book published, that’s a cakewalk compared to selling a script and getting it produced. I do confess I never felt completely comfortable in that world. I was never quite sure I had the format down, that I wasn’t over-writing (a screenwriter shouldn’t be directing the actors, for instance), that what I put on the page could be transferred to the screen. Books I understood. Scripts are even now still a mystery to me.

    But writing Icer led me to writing Tankborn, so obviously the time working on that script wasn’t wasted. And it was an amazing challenge and there were some very exciting times. I’m grateful for those who helped me along the way, who worked so hard to see my vision on the screen. I hope they’re satisfied with seeing it on the page instead, between the covers of a book.